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:iconvalronic:
Let me start by saying I really like the vast majority of what you produce, as well as the concept at work here. Cilestia being fat off of cake is funny to even say and more amusing still as an image. Cilestia + cake is really common but I don't remember seeing this idea executed in exactly this way before.

However the image itself doesn't really do much for this concept. The biggest weakness holding this image back is the lack of proper focus. Every other image you produce has a fantastic usage of lines lighting and character expression to draw the observer into whatever position and mindset you want.

The lines in this image draw the viewer to the arch of her back when it seems like the main point of the joke is her expression and the text on the scale. The size of the thought bubble takes up a large amount of the image and means that the arch of her back is at the center, further emphasizing it.

Also she just doesn't look fat in this image. I know slenderness is part of your style and you use it well most of the time but here it works against you. Even if its just a subtle chub there needs to be something in this image that justifies her reaction more than the text on the scale.

The background is the same color as your subject. You know better. Not being hateful. You genuinely have much better technical skill than this in most of what I see in your gallery. Dynamic lighting, emotive characters and focus that is worthy of emulation is all over your work. This piece seems to strangely avoid everything you are good at with the exceptions of interesting situations and well executed facial expression.

I hope this wasn't too harsh and I certainly don't want to make you feel discouraged. I would be proud if I made this image, but you can and have proven that you are way better than this.
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:iconwonderboltfanrainbow:
WonderboltfanRainbow Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2015
awwwww... well I like Cellie :love: only this explains why there are 4 STALLION-PEAGASUS ponies needed to fly her arround...(see Keep it calm and Flutter on episode and basically every time Cellie visit Ponyville)
Or when she dropped out of the sky in Pinkie Sence...O_0!
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:iconorigamialstar101:
OrigamialStar101 Featured By Owner Mar 25, 2015  Student Artist
The weight is a lot XD
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:iconfredcreator97:
Fredcreator97 Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2015
The cake is lie !GLaDOS emote 
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:iconshiroshototsu:
ShiroShototsu Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2015  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Celestia...

Better start cutting out bananas too...
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:iconflockofmoosen:
FlockOfMoosen Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2015
Royal Guard: No, Your Highness, there is nothing wrong with your... Umm... Curvy features... And... Umm... Uh... Shape. *sweats nervously*
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:iconmasterofthardus:
masterofThardus Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2015
That's what happens when you lead a sedentary lifestyle...
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:iconmlpegasis4898:
MLPegasis4898 Featured By Owner Edited Jan 17, 2015  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Pffftt! Hahahh! Oh, Celestia... your weight is... A LOT :XD: :XD: :XD:
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:iconinfernataeum:
Infernataeum Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2015
I see whatchu did here
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:iconaccount-potato:
account-potato Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2015
I think most of that's her legs.
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:iconamarilloyellow:
amarilloyellow Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2015
Haha
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:iconruroni-riu:
Ruroni-Riu Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
:rofl:
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:iconwork-fiction:
Work-Fiction Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
And that kids is the story of how Princess sun butt banished the royal scale to the moon. Clapping Pony Icon - Princess Celestia 
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:iconwait0wat:
Wait0wat Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2014
Smartass scale. XD
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:icongjtproductions:
GJTProductions Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2014
Or a trolling scale. Remember, we have :iconmlpdiscordplz: and :iconlunatrollplz: running about doing who-knows-what...
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:iconlillynightstar:
LillyNightstar Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2015  Student
Oh yeah, that would explain why Celestia seems to always be on diet!XD
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:iconmaddog12364:
maddog12364 Featured By Owner Sep 4, 2014  Student Digital Artist
hehehe
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:iconkotkadxx:
kotkadxx Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2014
xDDDDD
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:icondrx-raven:
DrX-Raven Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2014
Raven: Of course you weight a lot! You're a freaking Alicorn!
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:iconperfectblue97:
PerfectBlue97 Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Inspired by your comic: perfectblue97.deviantart.com/a…
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:iconarthurcrane:
ArthurCrane Featured By Owner Jul 9, 2014
Nothing wrong with being curvy, Your Highness.
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:icondrx-raven:
DrX-Raven Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2014
:icondeadpool--plz::iconsaysplz:Love your avatar!:iconsaysendplz:
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:iconrainygirl3100:
Rainygirl3100 Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
The cake was a lie(the cake totally looks like the silhouette of the cake slice from Portal)
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:iconchougingarasen:
ChouGingaRasen Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2014
The Sun is a mass of incandescent gas, a gigantic nuclear furnace~
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:iconpegaraffeasaurus:
Pegaraffeasaurus Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2014  Student General Artist
Yes! They Might Be Giants nerds! I'm not alone!
:iconbrohoof1plz::iconbrohoof2plz:
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:icongeneral5:
General5 Featured By Owner Jun 30, 2014  Student Artisan Crafter
*Locks cake in a Alicon proof safe*
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:icontdlova:
TDLOVA Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Dat face
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:iconschwarzerritter:
SchwarzerRitter Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2014
Celestia should get fat.
I bet a lot of fillies got anorexia, because they wanted to look more like her.

(I am aware that anorexia is mostly caused by social pressure)
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:iconvladimir-zharkov:
Vladimir-Zharkov Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2014
Anorexia Nervosa is largely genetic.
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:iconschwarzerritter:
SchwarzerRitter Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2014
A genetic component exists, but it could not be proven, that it is "largely" genetic.
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:iconvladimir-zharkov:
Vladimir-Zharkov Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2014
Actually there's some pretty good evidence for it being "largely" genetic. Sure it's not EXCLUSIVELY genetic, but it does play a role.

"Twin studies have shown a heritability rate of 56%."

"Association studies have been performed, studying 128 different polymorphisms related to 43 genes including genes involved in regulation of eating behavior, motivation and reward mechanics, personality traits and emotion."

Here's the link if you're interested in reading into it further. en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Anorexia…
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:iconschwarzerritter:
SchwarzerRitter Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2014
That only proves the predisposition is heritable. The genes just increase the risk of getting aneurexia.
The twins in question live together and are subjected to the same influences.
56% is relative low considering that.
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:iconderptheteletubbie:
DerpTheTeletubbie Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
She could just say its because of her hair or her size or the fact that she is an Alicorn she weighs moar
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:iconoverthelakepancake:
Overthelakepancake Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
hehe^^
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:iconevanzblack:
Evanzblack Featured By Owner Jun 10, 2014
IN YOU FACE FATTLESTIA!    


:la:always mean that XD 
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:iconblack-nocturne:
Black-Nocturne Featured By Owner May 31, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Это выражение лица! XD The cake is a lie!
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:iconscissor-mouth:
Scissor-Mouth Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I was thinking that when I saw the cake! >u<
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:iconanubislaughed:
Anubislaughed Featured By Owner May 31, 2014
I know that feels....
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:iconricardofr-200:
ricardofr-200 Featured By Owner May 30, 2014
:rofl:ROFLMAO!!!
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:icontemplar127:
templar127 Featured By Owner May 29, 2014
LOL! "A lot!"
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:iconrainygirl3100:
Rainygirl3100 Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Excuse me but your avatars thing appears to be trying to mine a Cobblestone block with an Iron Sword. No. Just no. That's not how things work
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:icontemplar127:
templar127 Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2014
But they do it in minecraft! XD
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:icondrx-raven:
DrX-Raven Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2014
Raven: What kind of idiot tries to mine using a swo-

:icondeadpool--plz::iconsaysplz:GIVE ME THE F***ING WOOD PLANKS, GODDANGIT!!! WHAT'S WITH THIS SCRAPPY SWORD?!!?:iconsaysendplz:

Raven: .......
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:icontemplar127:
templar127 Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2014
:dummy:
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:icondrx-raven:
DrX-Raven Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2014
Raven: Yes, he is....
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:icontemplar127:
templar127 Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2014
XD
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:iconrainygirl3100:
Rainygirl3100 Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
No. Just no. Not how it works
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:icondrx-raven:
DrX-Raven Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2014
:icondeadpool--plz::iconsaysplz:GIVE ME THE F***ING WOOD PLANKS, GODDANGIT!!! WHAT'S WITH THIS SCRAPPY SWORD?!!?:iconsaysendplz:
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:iconsonicfull:
SonicFull Featured By Owner May 29, 2014
guards who pulled the chariot,are planning records to go to the get back surgery!
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:iconartention:
Artention Featured By Owner May 29, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Love it ! xD
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:iconsleeping-sniper:
Sleeping-Sniper Featured By Owner May 28, 2014
To calculate the mass of the sun, simply weigh Celestia and multiple her weight by the amount of slices of cakes she has eaten.
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